This sample
attempts to describe an incident involving the object, but
there are errors in mechanics, sentence construction, and
usage- all of which interfere with the meaning of the piece.
The focus
of the piece is blurred by the introduction of a cousin in
the first paragraph who is not used in the second paragraph.
The meaning of the ending of the piece is unclear to the scorer.
Mechanically,
the piece contains run-on sentences and lacks past tense verb
endings and plural endings on nouns. There are also misused
relative pronouns and prepositions in addition to spelling
errors.
